Wrong: The operational goals of this organization include an increase in morale as well as overall job satisfaction.
Right: I want to enjoy working here. Ill bet you do, too.
Wrong: This action item calls for out-of-the-box thinking.
Right: If youve got an idea that youre afraid might be half-baked, lets consider it anyway.
Wrong: This training program teaches you to learn the best tricks, tips, techniques and skills for every stage of the market process.
Right: This program teaches the best marketing tricks.
Wrong: We have an exciting, brand new product that will easily and quickly solve your most difficult sales process problems.
Right: This product will help you turn prospects into customers in less time.
Wrong: We have the best service, the most reliable product and the friendliest salespeople.
Right: We won the XYZ best service award. Twice.
例子: Deciding to rescind the earlier estimate, our report was updated to include $40,000 for new equipment.应改为 Deciding to rescind our earlier estimate, we have updated our report to include $40,000 for new equipment. (We决定呀, 不是report.)
例子: He decided not to audit the last ten contracts. Because of our previous objections about compliance. 两个句子应该连在一起：He decided not to audit the last ten contracts because of our previous objections about compliance.
例子: The owner questioned the occupants lease intentions and the fact that the contract had been altered with ink markings. 应改为: The owner questioned the occupants lease intentions and ink alterations of the contract.
例如: An authorized person must show that they have security clearance. 应改为 Authorized persons must show that they have security clearance.
想想这两个句子的分别: 1. This is one of the public-relations functions that is under-budgeted. 2. This is one of the public-relations functions, which are under-budgeted.
例如: He did not make repairs, however, he continued to monitor the equipment. 应改为: He did not make repairs; however, he continued to monitor the equipment.
像 affect和effect，operative和operational等 等就要弄清楚才好用啦。
除非 必要不要整个词都大写，除非要骂人。例如: MUST change to OS immediately. 外国人就觉得不礼貌和喝令人一样。要强调的话，用底线，斜字，粗体就可以了。商务文书写作范文 商务写作的重要性